Today you are being asked to look back over your writing this term and choose your favourite example. You will need to say why it is your favourite in one of the boxes below. You will also need to show that you have responded to a comment from the teacher by changing (improving) something in your writing.
Copy and paste or type your chosen example in this box below
It was a cold windy night and I had three people living in my house counting myself. I like bunk beds in a two story house just in case there was a big flood. That night we had dinner and went to bed. The next day it was raining all day. Then in the afternoon it started to hail so no one could go outside. I was at work just serving customers at the most famous cafe in Aussie. After a few hours later water was starting to come into the cafe under the doors luckily I was at home. The way I knew is because my boss rang me up and told all about it I saw the water getting higher and higher I could see the from the house it was than the mountain |
I chose this example because:
it had things to do about global warming and that's what we are learning the most in the class. |
Comment from the teacher:
You do have some fresh original ideas and a nice personal kind of way of writing them down Georgia. You should keep writing as you have the potential to become very good at it Do make sure that you have read back over your writing and checked that you have put all of your capitals and full stops in and that all of your writing makes sense, for example, I like bed on a hill And can you spot any of the places you have missed out the capitals and full stops? |
How I used the information in this comment to improve my writing:
I read through my writing and corrected them. |
What I need to work on now to improve my writing:
I have to read back in my story more often because sometimes I don't spell words correctly |
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